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honest openions - 2/19/2009 6:12:37 PM

MIntribus

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broken bleeding, time stops. seeing into those eyes.
eyes hotter than the sun, colder than ice.
stareing, burning holes in my soul.
fighting not only the urge to give in, but the urge to flee.
slowly the sweat drips from tought muscle.
catching the chill of this frozen expance.
the blink of those eyes, shattering the silence.
my chance, there is the opening.
the only one since this debacle's beginning.
if only i could look away from that stare.
bringing my-self to move.
now.
here is the chance, perfect in its simplicity.
regretting the pain,
fealing the impact of this most agonizing set-back.......

well i would like to here honest thoughts on this pice. and i do appologise for any miss spelling now.
feal free to comment any who read this.
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RE: honest openions - 2/19/2009 9:29:07 PM

ScooterTrash

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quote:

ORIGINAL: MIntribus

well i would like to here honest thoughts on this pice. and i do appologise for any miss spelling now.

Well at least you asked for a pardon up front, there are in fact several errors, even in the title of the post. No real comment on the piece, I never really "get" these things.

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RE: honest openions - 2/20/2009 12:12:53 AM

FullfigRIMAAM1

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Scooter, you are very sweet.

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RE: honest openions - 2/20/2009 1:23:17 AM

angelikaJ