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novice - 5/5/2012 2:34:46 AM

mmmslave51

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i am new to the scene and site would there be a sympathetic master/misstress to advise on how to put up a tolerable profile that might catch the eye of an interested party, I know this a big ask, but if you could help would in your debt and would reciprocate in any way I could

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RE: novice - 5/5/2012 4:32:35 AM

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Hi there and welcome to the site. The heck with the offer of eternal servitude for assistance - we're just helpful folks.

1. First off, what's your name? Calling you mmmslave51 is kind of a mouthful.
2. What are you looking for? As is, your profile shows what kinds of play you like, and that's just about it. If you're looking for nothing beyond play sessions, that's fine. But if you're looking for a full relationship, give the sort of info useful for knowing you.
3. I would avoid the word "tuition" unless there is to be money involved. To me, there's a strong connotation.
4. "Just starting gender reassignment" - I presume that that means that you're just beginning hormones with SRS a possibility on the horizon. How comfortable are you in women's clothes, makeup, walking, etc.?
4. Your weight's off. I suspect you;re really 132 lbs, and mistyped as kilos instead of lbs.

I'd suggest something like:

Hi there. My name's Laura. Good to meet you.
I've been on the earth 51 years. That said, I've been a woman for only 1 of them. The benefits to you are that I've got a drive to be feminine that you cannot believe, plus breasts that are as firm as a teenage girl's. I've been dressing as a woman for three years now, and am more than passable.
Right now, I'm looking for a relationship. I'm happy with Doms, Dommes, or couples. I'd fit into a poly situation well (I'd LOVE a sister submissive!), so if you've been looking for a girl to add to your couple...
I'm a pretty fair cook, decent with handywoman work and home maintenance, and a decent housecleaner.
I expect to work outside the home. I'm a car mechanic by trade.

My needs are:
A lot of conversation. We girls talk a lot.
An introduction to this world. That includes play sessions, as well as getting out to munches/parties and meeting the locals with you.

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The above is written for someone looking for a full-on relationship. Note that it aims for couples new to poly - that's because there are so many of them looking for a bi girl to add, so you've got a heavy demand. Also, I suspect you'd want a woman to share experiences with, and finding a Domme is far harder than a couple.

Welcome again!

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The small-breasted ones want larger breasts. The large-breasted ones want smaller ones. The straight-haired ones curl their hair, and the curly-haired ones straighten theirs...

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RE: novice - 5/5/2012 4:56:01 AM

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oh thanks kind sir, my names monica btw, do you suggest changing my name here?, thats all cool and good advice that I will act upon, practically spot on I would say, thank you so much xx

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RE: novice - 5/5/2012 5:16:40 AM

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thanks to DarkSteven I just updated my profile hope it sounds better?

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RE: novice - 5/5/2012 5:55:27 AM

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Welcome

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my name is : bonsh ... jamesh bonsh.
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RE: novice - 5/5/2012 6:10:48 AM

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Much better, Monica, and good to meet you. A few other comments about your profile:

1. I REALLY don't like that "without embarrassment to myself or friends". I'd much prefer simply "passable".
2. I love the passage that says you "always try to present smart and sexy, so im used to wearing womens clothes, i walk in heels as well as any woman, im used to wearing and putting on make-up, I always prefer skirts and heels." That tells me that you will be out in public with me and present yourself well. It also hints that you're likely not going to be doing auto repair, and that is brought out more when you state how much you like domestic chores. It also starts to "paint the picture" showing what life with you might be like.
3. I like the section beginning "the benefit to you". Good sales job. I had of course overlooked in my previous suggestions that since you're just beginning the journey, your breasts haven't grown in yet. I assume you're either using or planning to use hormones?

Based on the profile as it stands, I'd be more than willing to try you out in our household.

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The small-breasted ones want larger breasts. The large-breasted ones want smaller ones. The straight-haired ones curl their hair, and the curly-haired ones straighten theirs...

Quit fretting. We men love you."

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RE: novice - 5/5/2012 7:48:14 AM

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ok more good advice thank you so much monica xx

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RE: novice - 5/5/2012 7:56:31 AM

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