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Hi profile advice needed - 5/14/2009 9:56:15 AM

jfk666

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Hi I'm newish on here but need some advice on my profile so I can better it I would apreciate honest contrusctive critism so i can hopefully meet a nice genuine sub but also make friends with some nice people on here to chat to and exchange ideas etc.

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RE: Hi profile advice needed - 5/14/2009 9:56:29 PM

DarkSteven

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Okayyyy... I looked at your profile. While I don;t believe that a Dom should be a dour sourpuss, your profile just seemed... lightweight to me.

The grammar is weak. You frequently run sentences together by omitting periods. You spell "the" "teh" numerous times. You're either using a Web convention or are too lazy to proofread.

You have two journal entries. One tells us you've found a fake! (That's kinda like someone working in the government and making the discovery that a coworker took more than an hour on lunch!) The other tells of this nifty site you found!

The entire profile gives the impression of a newbie who's excited to be in the scene. But you claim to be an expert with canes and crops, as well as obedience training, and other heavy things.

Hey, you asked for feedback...

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The small-breasted ones want larger breasts. The large-breasted ones want smaller ones. The straight-haired ones curl their hair, and the curly-haired ones straighten theirs...

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RE: Hi profile advice needed - 5/15/2009 4:37:54 AM

lizi

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From what I've read here, women will want to know what you have to offer outside of just sexual interests. Concentrate on showing more of your personality or what else you are doing with your life, what interests you...so on. I think a lot of men make the mistake of putting the sex out there first and foremost while ignoring what makes them who they are. To put it quite simply, most of the women here can get sex anytime they want it, what else can you give them?
I know that it seems counter intuitive to be on a kink site and then have to sell yourself as a person outside of what makes you kinky, but that is what we want to know about you

This seems picky and has been mentioned but poor spelling and grammar also count. Other people have asked this same question about what to have in the profile, try the search function on the bottom of the page- right hand side. You'll find a wealth of information in some old threads. Good luck!

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RE: Hi profile advice needed - 5/16/2009 4:52:21 PM

jfk666

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thank you to both of you they were very good and very helpful coments

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